Echo of My Heart
moving outward from its source
drifting westward like the sun
soaring skyward beyond the clouds
bouncing downward reversing course
never wayward on this voyage
rearward path poignantly traversed
returning inward somewhat diminished
always the steward of my being
this awkward echo of my heart
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Linked to dVerse Poets Pub — Quadrille #134 — We {heart} poems, where De Jackson is hosting and instructed us to put our heart into it, and pen a poem of precisely 44 words (not counting the title), including some form of the word heart.
Quadrille: A poetic form introduced at dVerse Poets Pub circa 2011. The rules for Quadrille: not including the title, a poem of exactly 44 words using the prompt word or its variant.
Something about the phrase “awkward echo of my heart” really speaks to me. Love this.
Thank you for the prompt. The word “echo” has been echoing in my brain all day, and when you offered of the prompt word “heart”, I just put them together.
I really like that phrase, too–“this awkward echo of my heart.” The heart takes some journeys, doesn’t it?
It sure does. Thanks Merril.
You’re welcome, Ron.
Very excellent. I personally felt most at home with, “rearward path poignantly traversed” – it’s… well, poignant. Altogether, however, powerful word choices, excellently crafted.
Thanks Masa
Nicedly written.
Thanks Beverly.
I am stunned by this line:
“always the steward of my being”
So perfect.
Thanks Lisa. I think that was the last line I added to get me to 44 words.
You’re welcome.
This is amazing. All the directions a heart takes!
Thanks Mary
Nice one, Ron!
Thanks Lucy
So true and apt! Love your quadrille!
Thanks Carol
Ron.
I love the underlying thought, that it’s the movements of the heart that track our progress in this voyage of life. Beautifully expressed.
pax,
dora
Thanks Dora
This is a great line – the heart is the center of one’s being..follow the echo
always the steward of my being
last line made me smile. captured this journey called life.
Thanks. Any day I can make someone smile is a good day.
‘this awkward echo of my heart’ – such an exquisite phrase, and a delightful quadrille on this theme.
Thanks Ingrid
It marches to its own tune and whatever direction it fancies, isn’t it! Love the inward returning of the awkward echo of the heart.
Thanks Punam. It started as a poem about an echo but was magically transformed somewhere along the way.
Love when this magic takes place organically. You are welcome, Ron.
humble applause
<3
David
I enjoyed that, Ron. Very nicely done.
Love how you used ‘awkward’ describing matters of the heart. Yes, often we feel and act awkwardly.
More than the words alone, the cadence of this poem is really really lovely!
Awkward echo… what a great phrase.